David, Thanks for moving this document along and maturing the content and my thanks to the entire TSC for the hard work and thoughts! Regarding immediate tactical feedback (Nits:-) 1. All the page numbers are set to 18 2. 1.2 - you still have the term "while section 4 we identify the current result of this process in the form of high value use cases and scenarios". I believe this should be "capabilities" which is the term I think we are now using 3. 1.3 - The last sentence "Our focus is on standards and tools to effectively build and utilize the last of these" is a little confusing... Is the "last of these "Grids built on dedicated resources ranging from blade servers in a corporate data center to tans-national collections of supercomputers" or does this statement only refer to "trans-national supercomputers". I would reword for clarity. 4. Section 3, in the paragraph below the picture, the word "to" needs to be included in the sentence "Each of these groups meets to capture requirements that are particular [to] that group. 5. Section 3, "range of actions and responses", there seem to be some redundancy here. Bullet 4 talks about "ignore as out of scope" (not great language) and bullet 10 has the same idea. Bullet 2 "start a new standards group" and bullet 6 "form a new standards working group" also overlap. I would reword bullet 7 to make it less "Enterprise-specific" and clearer. Possibly something like ... "Form a new Research or Community group to develop a best practice document that might offer an interim solution until a more standardized approach can be matured and adopted." 6. Section 4, Title .... The title is "High Priority Capabilities" but then you go on to explain that "no priority has been associated with the list" - seems inconsistent. Also the first sentence needs CAPs 7. I think you need to unify the "tables". Table 1 has Category/Capability, Table 2 has Capability but they are not organized by "Category" (except that our Areas are a type of Category :-). I would opt'd for changing table 2 to align with Category/Capability and loose the Area designation. This way you have a consistent table throughout showing (1) Category/Capability; (2) Category/Capability/OGF Specification/Status/Milestone; (3) Category/Capability/Group or Comment and Maturity level. I think this will simplify things a little. Longer-term feedback for after the public comment period I think we need to bring into this document a little more of the broader context and landscape upon which we are operating. The notion that (1) we don't want to or have to do all the standards for distributed computing and so we collaborate extensively with other Standards Development organizations and leverage existing and well adopted standards extensively needs to be better articulated (2) we are no longer in a green field situation. Organizations around the world are building and operating grids today and thus our standardization efforts should be informed by both architecture and community practice. And ... we may want to state what our "architectural approach" or "principles" are for the reader in a future version (3) I would continue to like to see work done on relating Categories/Capabilities to Use Cases to enable the reader to make the connection to relevance. I know this is continuing to be discussed ... (4) not to state the obvious, but our current gap analysis needs quite a bit of maturing :-) Thanks again to the team. I think this is a reasonable start and I very much appreciate the hard work that it has taken by the team and contributors to reach this first milestone. All the best, Mark Mark Linesch: Open Grid Forum (OGF): Hewlett Packard 281-514-0322 (Tel): 281-414-7082 (Cell) mark.linesch@hp.com : linesch@ogf.org -----Original Message----- From: gfsg-bounces@ogf.org [mailto:gfsg-bounces@ogf.org] On Behalf Of David Snelling Sent: Friday, January 19, 2007 10:49 AM To: GFSG GFSG; TSC Subject: [gfsg] Technical Strategy Document Folks, This is now (I believe) ready for Public Comment. I have done as much as possible with the time and effort available (mine and other's). The process we agreed to at the F2F is as follows: 1) Between now and next Friday, this document is in "WG Last Call", with the combined forces of the GFSG and the TSC acting as the WG. 2) Please for minor changes send text-only based suggestions in an email to me, but the document should be pretty clean now. 3) Major suggestions for future work should be emailed to me for inclusion in the trackers for later versions. 3) Major objections at your peril. This version is changed tracked, except for the tables 1 and 3, which are all new. Enjoy. -- Take care: Dr. David Snelling < David . Snelling . UK . Fujitsu . com > Fujitsu Laboratories of Europe Hayes Park Central Hayes End Road Hayes, Middlesex UB4 8FE +44-208-606-4649 (Office) +44-208-606-4539 (Fax) +44-7768-807526 (Mobile)