Hi,
I’ve uploaded v5 of the OGSA Roadmap document for
review at Wednesday’s meeting – you can find it at: http://tinyurl.com/ccsza.
These are mostly my usual nitpick editing changes, and there
are a lot of them, so given that the document is quite short it’s
probably easiest to read it with a fresh eye than try to follow the changes.
1) Although the changes are significant, I didn’t intentionally
change any substance, except as noted below – just reworded things in
some places.
2) In 2.2, OGSA Profiles, there seemed to be a problem with
the flow – it went back mid-section and described again what OGSA Profiles
are, but in a different way. So I reorganized it to what I believe is a
logical flow, by moving paragraphs and, in some cases, parts of sentences
around (e.g. the first sentence was moved from the middle of the section). Other
than one para (the one that begins “In addition…”) I don’t
believe I changed the wording much in this section – the changes are all
just cut and paste, and I haven’t deleted anything.
3) In 2.4, OGSA Branding, I had some problems with the
original wording, and reworded it to what I *think*
it was intended to say. I may have got this wrong, so it will need
careful review! But I’m aware that Hiro was passing this section to
the GFSG, so we may want to reject these changes and leave it as is until we
have agreement.
I’ve also reviewed the Tracker items that Hiro had set
to “fixed,” and closed all but one of them.
- Jem
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Jem Treadwell
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