Marty and other authors,

Having read the document fairly carefully, I can only pick nits

(but I think they're worth fixing before submitting to the editor).

See below.

My references to section numberings refer to the version circulated
by Marty, and might not match those in Hiro's version.

Best wishes,

Stephen

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Section 3.9 OperatingSystem.
"and if the consuming system does not understand
the provided extension content"
* Do you mean “requested” instead of “provided” here?

Section 3.10 CPUArchitecture.
* Same text, same question.

Section 3.11 TotalCPUCount
* Suggest insert "BES" before "UnsupportedFeatureFault"
for consistency.

Section 4.2 FactoryResourceAttributesDocument contents
"on a request to request basis"
* Suggest replacing "to" -> "by"

Section 5 Security Considerations
"mechanisms which HPC Basic Profile compliant
implementations must support is defined"
* Replace "is" -> "are"

Section 5 Security Considerations
"Compliant implementations may support"
* Suggest "may" -> "MAY"

Section 5.1 Security Requirements of the HPC Basic Profile
* Suggest replacing "service/client" by "service and client"

Section 5.2 HPC Basic Profile Message Security
* Suggest replacing
"[WS-I Basic Security Profile Version 1.0, Working Group Draft,2006-08-17]"
by a shorter reference, e.g. "[WSIBSP10]"
and spelling it out in the references at the end.

Section 5.3 TLS/SSL with Username-Password Client Authentication
* Suggest replacing
"[Web Services Security UsernameToken Profile, Working Draft 2, OASIS, 23 Feb 2003]."
by a shorter reference, e.g. "[WSSUTP]"
and spelling it out in the references at the end.

Section 11 Normative References
* The references need some work - see below.
There's some missing references to IETF RFCs.
[BES10] now has GFD number 97 pre-assigned, so you can use this.
I've provided the full name of [JSDL10] below.
Is the latest version of [WSSUTP] really dated 23 Feb 2003?

[BES10] *** fill this in ***.
[JSDL10] GFD.56 Job Submission Description Language (JSDL) Specification v1.0.

Available at http://www.ogf.org/documents/GFD.56.pdf
[JSDLHPC] *** fill this in ***
[HPC-U] *** fill this in ***
[RFC 2119] Bradner, S. Key words for use in RFCs to Indicate Requirement Levels.

Internet En-gineering Task Force, RFC 2119, March 1997.

Available at http://www.ietf.org/rfc/rfc2119.txt
[RFC2240] *** fill this in ***
[RFC2560] *** fill this in ***
[RFC3280] *** fill this in ***
[RFC4346] *** fill this in ***
[WSIBSP10] WS-I Basic Security Profile Version 1.0, Working Group Draft,2006-08-17.
[WSSUTP] Web Services Security UsernameToken Profile, Working Draft 2, OASIS, 23 Feb 2003.

From: ogsa-hpcp-wg-bounces@ogf.org [mailto:ogsa-hpcp-wg-bounces@ogf.org] On Behalf Of Marty Humphrey
Sent: 01 February 2007 01:13
To: 'ogsa-hpcp-wg@ggf.org'
Subject: [ogsa-hpcp-wg] LAST CALL for HPC Basic Profile doc (make commentsbefore Wed Feb 7)

Folks,

First, I want to thank everyone for attending today’s HPC Profile WG session. I think it was very productive!

As we agreed in the session, I am now issuing “LAST CALL” on the HPC Basic Profile doc (available at http://forge.gridforum.org/sf/go/doc13736). Please give it a thorough reading and provide comments BEFORE 1 week from today (that is, make comments before end of day Wed Feb 7). After last call, we’ll give it to our area directors, and it will then go into public comment shortly thereafter.

Again, thanks a bunch! I think we’re making great progress!!!

-- Marty