The narrow columns on the side of the figures are difficult to read, typographically not advisable (spacing between letters becomes irregular): what about a single column, with the figure on one side? With saved space I suggest to give more relevance to title and subtitle. There are some redundant/useless words around: I found "including e.g.", "and also", "typical". I'd say "more than twenty" instead of "dozens", and "is going to be" instead of "is expected to be" (if true). Evaluate "computers" instead of "servers" (accent on "compute", consistent with figure). 2011/11/1 Alan Sill <alan.sill@ttu.edu>
Hi Jamie,
Quite possibly.
Group, what are your thoughts? I am on a plane to the location of the workshop shortly, so please gather and send any other corrections to Joel. (He will be traveling soon too, but I think there is time to incorporate correction suggestions.)
Alan
On Nov 1, 2011, at 3:12 AM, Jamie Marshall wrote:
Hello Alain,
I agree it looks better with the lighter font. In the central diagram it mentions "Operation", I was wondering if the official OCCI model term of "Action" would be more approriate ?
Sincerely Jamie Marshall Expertise Manager Prologue Accords, Cords, Comons Architect Compatible One
From: alan.sill@ttu.edu Date: Tue, 1 Nov 2011 03:04:37 -0500 To: occi-wg@ogf.org CC: replogle@ogf.org; Craig.A.Lee@aero.org; alan.sill@ttu.edu Subject: Re: [occi-wg] OCCI flyer for NIST and SC11
This one has slightly better layout and a lighter body font.
On Nov 1, 2011, at 2:40 AM, Sill, Alan wrote:
Attached is a flyer describing OCCI for use at the NIST workshop. Those who are going to SuperComputing may wish to put this out, along with others that we plan to make, for distribution at their booths or otherwise make use of it.
Please review it and pass on any comments ASAP.
Thanks, Alan
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